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'Poem: Desperate'
 
 

Document 3 out of 15 by TJMcCulley.

...::sighs::...


 
 

I am desperate

I am writhing

Dear goddess I can not see the floor!

I don't know

when he left me

But his emptiness fills the void!

I am screaming

I am dreaming

Where has all the children gone?

I am angry

I am hopeless

Nothing and everything, the epilouge of a snuffed life!

I can't seem

to find the reason

The guilt plays dark against my cheeks!

I was nothing

but an innocent

Why has he stripped it from me?

Was I always

So terribly naive

I can no longer taste the winter!

Can I hope

can I dream

This story has abrubtly finished!

Dear cherub

am I bleeding

For the life of me I can not tell!

I am desperate

I am writhing

Dear goddess I can not see the floor!

 
 
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Comments for this story:
DateNameComment
Feb 3 2000 Amy-Wormwe all get a lil down from time to time, tiffy bean.. but I -am- here for ya! all of us are ::snuggles.. pressing little smiles against her neck::
Feb 29 2000 Elfwood writer: Gabriella Jönsson, (Click here to visit!)hmm, very likeable. It's almost surrealistic in its ongoing flow of different images and lines that fit together - yet each seem to tell their own story. I'll have to read it again.
Mar 2 2000 Elfwood writer: Katrina L. Kennedy, (Click here to visit!)Lemme guess... tall, dark, and ... let's kick his ass! =) Hey, at least we don't have to deal with him at school anymore. I wuv you sooooo much Tiffy-Bean! =) I'm sure kicking his stupid butt would be a great bonding experience. =) Even if I'm wrong about this poem being about him... I'm sure you'd love to go on a butt-kicking spree with me. =) *hint hint* =)
Mar 7 2000 Elfwood writer: Tom Critchlow, (Click here to visit!)I can guess what it's about, and as such, I have mixed feelings. On the one hand, I'm sure he had his reasons, on the other hand, this poem kicks ass!!! Excellent imagery yet again!
Dec 2 2001 Elfwood writer: Oishee =victim of a down= Alam Omg.... I really love your work.... Where do you get your ideas??
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